苏萦 -
Gary XXXX Dear Professor:
Hello! I am a professional pianist from China"s students. I have been very much admired and yearning for XXXInstitute of music --- it by the world"s most famous music school. Nevertheless, because I do not fully prepared last year, plus the school is very fierce competition, I gave up at the last minute sit for your school. Although I am a student at XXX conservatory of music, but I am not satisfied with only grade school in this study. Next year, I resolve to sit for XXXInstitute of music, and has prepared a full repertoire.
When Xue-Qin self-starting, I know that you - the world-renowned pianist large and educators. I aspire to become at an early age to your students, but because I am not in the United States, it has been unable to realize my wish.
XXX I now live in the city. Saturday is two days of rest since Sunday, so I hope to be able to xxx in the past two days with you to class. I very much hope that by your pointing out, but also you can look in his busy schedule, some time out to meet me a little desire. But if you did not have the time Saturday, Sunday, Monday to Friday can be, although I may be some lessons, but I will certainly be able to overcome all difficulties guarantee, in any specified time you reach. As long as you can at any time in a week out of one hour at the time gave me a lesson, I will be very grateful for the.
I eagerly look forward to your responses, thank you!
意思是;盖瑞 XXXX 亲爱的教授:
哈罗! 我是来自中国籍的学生的一个专业的钢琴家。 我已经非常被赞美和热望的为音乐的 XXXInstitute--- 它被世界最出名的音乐学校。然而，因为我不去年完全准备了，加上学校是非常凶猛的竞争，我在最后一刻放弃了为你的学校应考。 虽然我是音乐的 XXX 温室的一位学生, 但是，但是我不对这研究的唯一的小学感到满意。 在明年，我解决为音乐的 XXXInstitute 应考, 而且已经准备一个完整的戏剧节目。
当 Xue-Qin 的自我出发, 我知道那你 - 世界-有名的钢琴家大大地和教育家。 我热望在一个早的年龄对你的学生变成，但是因为我不在美国，它已经不能够了解我的希望。
XXX 我现在住在城市。 星期六自从星期日以后是二天的休息, 因此我希望在过去二天中和你，对 xxx 要能够分类。我非常根据你指出希望那，但是你也能顺便探访他的忙碌时间表, 一些时间在外遇到我小欲望。 但是如果你星期六没有时间, 星期日, 星期一对星期五能是, 虽然我可能是一些课，但是我将会无疑地能够克服所有的困难保证，在任何的指定时间内，你到达。 只要你在一个星期中随时能在那时从一小时给予了我一门课, 我将会非常感谢对那。
我热心地盼望你的反应,谢谢你!
我的答案是:Dear Gary XXXX professor:(he is a male of)
How do you do!I am a piano which comes from China professional student.I have been admiring and looking forward to XXXInstitute of music very-this is in the world most the music school of Zhao.However prepared insufficiency last year because of I, add it enter school a competition again very vigorous, I at end a moment gave up to register for examination an expensive school.Although I study in the of music of the XXX conservatory currently, I dissatisfied foot with only at this of the school study.My decision will register for examination XXXInstitute of music next year, and have already got ready all songs.
The ego beginning learns the time of piano, I know you-this of big pianist, educator.I looked forward to the student who can become you since childhood, however wasn"t in the United States because of me, so has been can"t carry out my wishes.
I live in the XXX City currently.Because Saturday Sunday is the double rests a day, so I hope to go to xxx City to come to have a class with you in this two days.I hope to get your to point out very and also hoping you can draw out to satisfy my this very small wishes for a little times in 100 favours.However if you have no horary words on Saturday Sunday, from Monday to Friday can also, though I may some lessons, I promise and can must overcome all difficulties and arrive in any time that you specify.As long as you can draw out time to give me previous lesson for a hour at any time in every week, I felt grateful very.
I am hot to slice of hope your reply, thanks!
(I this is completely and all the letter which press Chinese to write of, if not too match American believe of write a method, everyone for me change once, also have, need not word by word turn over, the meaning arrives like, thank everyone)
The problem add:The good elephant all has a little a small problem, someone affirm which is accurate without any error?Because this E-MAIL is very important, influence my life of...The person of behind doesn"t want to copy a front of
I am in the United States and I don"t be to admit, tested.
Suggest of too thankful everyone!
我的答案意思是:亲爱的盖瑞 XXXX 教授:(他是男性)
你如何做!我是来自中国籍的专业学生的一架钢琴。我是赞赏的而且非常盼望音乐的 XXXInstitute-这在世界上大部分 Zhao 的音乐学校。去年然而因为我准备了不充分, 增加它进入学校一个竞争再非常精力充沛的, 我在结束片刻放弃登记考试一所贵的学校。虽然我学习在那 XXX 的音乐保存性现在, 我使感觉不满脚与只有在那学校研究的这。我的决定在明年将会登记音乐的考试 XXXInstitute, 而且已经得到预备好的状态所有的歌了。
自我开始学习钢琴的时候，我认识你-这大钢琴家,教育家。我盼望自从孩童时期以后能变成你的学生, 然而不是在美国因为我, 因此已经是罐子不实行我的希望。
我现在住在 XXX 城市。因为星期六星期日是两倍的休息一天，因此，我希望去 xxx 城市开始在这和你有一个班级二天。我希望拿你的非常指出以及希望你能变长在 100个好意方面使我的这非常小的希望满意小的时代。然而如果你在星期六星期日没有时间的字, 从星期一到星期五罐子也, 虽然我可能一些课, 我答应和罐子一定克服所有的困难而且抵达随时你叙述。像你能拉一样长的出自时间在每个星期随时给我一个小时的早先课, 我觉得感谢真正。
我热希望切成薄片你的答复,谢谢!
(我这是完全地和所有的那信压中国的写, 如果不也相配美国人相信写一个方法, 每个人为我改变一次, 也有, 需要不字旋转的字上面的, 意义到达同类, 谢谢每个人)
问题补述：: ，某人断言哪一个没有任何的错误是正确的?因为这一份电子邮件非常重要, 影响我的生活。。。臀部的人不想要复印前线
我在美国，而且我不将承认,测试。
建议太感谢的每个人!
clc1 -
Your honor Professor XXXX（或直接说Dear Mr. Gary）
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。我一直十分
仰慕和向往XXX音乐学院---这所世界上最著名的音乐学院。
How do you do! I am a music college student from China major in piano playing. For a long time I keep admiring and yearning for XXXX Music Academy ,the most famous music academy around the world.
然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校。虽然目前我就读于XXXX，但我并不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习。我决心于明年报考XXXX，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
However, I decided at the last moment to give up the entrance test last year due to insufficient preparation together with consideration of the cutthroat competition. Although being enrolled in XXXX,I am unsatisfied with studying in such a baddish school. I determine to enter myself for the examination of XXXX next year with adequate
preparation for all the music programs.
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。
I heard about you when I began to learn playing piano and got the information that you had been the famous master pianist and educationalist in the world. From my childhood, I yearned for being one of your students. However until now I haven"t realized my dream because I have no chance living in the USA.
我目前住在XXX。由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到XXX来跟您上课。我十分希望得到您的
指点，还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。
I am lodging in XXXX.I would like to attend your class this weekend. I hope I could do with your directions. Please make my dream coming true with your several minutes cost!
不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。
In case you are busy on Saturday and Sunday, it shall be available at any time in the five working days. I will surely be present on time you scheduled with eliminating all the difficulties even though I might attend some other classes.I am so gratitude for one hour lecture from you any time per week.
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！
Sincerely looking forward to your reply. Thank you so much!
ardim -
亲爱的Gary XXXX教授(他是男的)：
Dear professor Gary XXX:
Hello!I am from China,I am majoring in Piano.I admire you from the moment I knew of you,I have been yearning for XXXinstitute of music,which is the most famous music school in the world.Last year,I failed to enroll your school because of my inadequate preparation and intense competition .I am studying at XXX conservatory of music,but I am not contented with my studying here,I determined to take the examination for getting access to your school,now I have prepared all the music needed.
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。我一直十分仰慕和向往XXXInstitute of music---这所世界上最著名的music school。然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校。虽然目前我就读于XXX conservatory of music，但我并不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习。我决心于明年报考XXXInstitute of music，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。Since I began my Piano lesson,I knew you as a famous Pianist and educator.I have been longing for being a student of you,because I didn"t live in America,I can"t make my dream come true.
我目前住在XXX市。由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市来跟您上课。我十分希望得到您的指点，还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。Now I live in XXX,since Saturday and sunday are public rest days,I hope I can attend your training class.I would be very grateful if you could kindly spare some time for teaching me.不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。 If you are tied up on Saturday and Sunday,the first day to fifth day of a week is available to me,though there may be some troubles with my schedule,but I can cope with it.If you could offer an-hour class to me in each week,I will appreciate you very much!
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！I am eager to get the reply from you!
meira -
Gary XXXX Dear Professor:
Hello! I am a professional pianist from China"s students. I have been very much admired and yearning for XXXInstitute of music --- it by the world"s most famous music school. Nevertheless, because I do not fully prepared last year, plus the school is very fierce competition, I gave up at the last minute sit for your school. Although I am a student at XXX conservatory of music, but I am not satisfied with only grade school in this study. Next year, I resolve to sit for XXXInstitute of music, and has prepared a full repertoire.
When Xue-Qin self-starting, I know that you - the world-renowned pianist large and educators. I aspire to become at an early age to your students, but because I am not in the United States, it has been unable to realize my wish.
XXX I now live in the city. Saturday is two days of rest since Sunday, so I hope to be able to xxx in the past two days with you to class. I very much hope that by your pointing out, but also you can look in his busy schedule, some time out to meet me a little desire. But if you did not have the time Saturday, Sunday, Monday to Friday can be, although I may be some lessons, but I will certainly be able to overcome all difficulties guarantee, in any specified time you reach. As long as you can at any time in a week out of one hour at the time gave me a lesson, I will be very grateful for the.
I eagerly look forward to your responses, thank you!
Chen -
亲爱的Gary XXXX教授(他是男的)：
Dear Gary,(楼上都用双引号，全错，应该用逗号)
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。
I am a student in piano from China.
我一直十分仰慕和向往XXXInstitute of music---这所世界上最著名的music school。
I always dreaming to enter the XXX Institute of Music---the most famous/reputable music school.
然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校。
As for the insufficient preparation and fierce/brutal competitition, I gave up the chance.
虽然目前我就读于XXX conservatory of music，但我并不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习。
Now I am in XXX conservatory of music, but I am not satisfied with this level of study.
我决心于明年报考XXXInstitute of music，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
I am determined to/decide to take the entrance exam of XXXInstitute of Music, and I have prepared all the epertoires.
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。
I have known you are a famous pianist since my study of piano.我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。
I am willing to be your student all the time.However, as I am not in USA, this dream hasn"t come true.
我目前住在XXX市。
I am living in XXX
由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市来跟您上课。
I would really like to attend your lessons for the weekend.
我十分希望得到您的指点，还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。
I am grateful if you can give me some guidance when time permits.
不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。
If you are not available in weekend, Monday to Friday is also OK for me.I will arrive on time no matter how hard it is.
只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。
I greatly appreciate it if you can teach me for an hour whenever you are availabe.
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！
I am looking forward to your reply.Thanks!
楼上很多机器翻译，而且很多错误，我建议你一开始第一句还是直接说明你想上他的课好一点，老外不喜欢太多铺垫的，你这样的中文信不适合外国风格。
风头疯子 -
Dear Professor Gary XXXX:
Hello! I am come from China"s piano specialized student. Icontinuously extremely admire and yearn for XXXInstitute of inmusic--- this world most famous music school. However because my lastyear prepared not fully, added the matriculation competition to beextremely intense, I have not been able to enter the school which Iyearned for. Although at present I go study to XXX conservatory ofmusic, but I certainly do not satisfy . I was determined the nextyear will register for XXXInstitute of music once more, and alreadyprepared the complete program.
Oneself start study qin time, I know that you - the world-renowned pianist large and educators, the educationalist. I yearned for since childhoodcan become you the student, however as a result of me not in US,therefore continuously is unable to realize my desire.
I at present live in XXX city. Because Saturday Sunday is double restsJapan, therefore I hoped can listen to you in these two days to xxxcity to attend class. I extremely hoped obtains your direction, evenif short several minutes Also looks you to be able in spite of beingvery busy, extracts time to satisfy I this small desire. If youSaturday Sunday do not have the time, also may, the time which assignsin any you arrive Monday through Friday. So long as you can in eachweek any time extracts for a hour the time for me on a hall class, Iextremely felt grateful.
I earnest hoped your reply, thanks!
亲爱的Gary XXXX教授：
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。我一直十分仰慕和向往XXXInstitute of music---这所世界上最著名的music school。然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我没能进入我所向往的学校。虽然目前我就读于XXX conservatory of music，但我并不满足.。我决心明年再次报考XXXInstitute of music，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。
我目前住在XXX市。由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市听您上课。我十分希望得到您的指点，哪怕短短的几分钟.还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以,在任何您指定的时间到达。只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！
这是我修改的.
黑桃花 -
亲爱的Gary XXXX教授(他是男的)：
Dear Gary,(楼上都用双引号，全错，应该用逗号)
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。
I am a student in piano from China.
我一直十分仰慕和向往XXXInstitute of music---这所世界上最著名的music school。
I always dreaming to enter the XXX Institute of Music---the most famous/reputable music school.
然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校。
As for the insufficient preparation and fierce/brutal competitition, I gave up the chance.
虽然目前我就读于XXX conservatory of music，但我并不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习。
Now I am in XXX conservatory of music, but I am not satisfied with this level of study.
我决心于明年报考XXXInstitute of music，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
I am determined to/decide to take the entrance exam of XXXInstitute of Music, and I have prepared all the epertoires.
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。
I have known you are a famous pianist since my study of piano.我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。
I am willing to be your student all the time.However, as I am not in USA, this dream hasn"t come true.
我目前住在XXX市。
I am living in XXX
由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市来跟您上课。
I would really like to attend your lessons for the weekend.
我十分希望得到您的指点，还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。
I am grateful if you can give me some guidance when time permits.
不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。
If you are not available in weekend, Monday to Friday is also OK for me.I will arrive on time no matter how hard it is.
只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。
I greatly appreciate it if you can teach me for an hour whenever you are availabe.
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！
I am looking forward to your reply.Thanks!
可桃可挑 -
下面是帮你翻译的信。说是翻译，其实不完全是翻译， 按照英文的行文方式和处事方式做了适当调整。最明显的有：
1。 不贬低你现在的学校。一所学校更好， 大家都知道，不需要特别说明。 追求更好的学校都可以理解。
2。 将“然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校”一句改写成了“我去年因为觉得自己还没有准备好，所以没有申请贵校”。 不要把你自己塑造成一个害怕竞争和怯场的人。
3。 “我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。” 帮你改写成了“我自幼就me梦想能成为您的学生，然而由于实际的原因而一直无法实现。”
4。 致谢部分按英语习惯改写为“I send you my sincere thanks for your attentions, and I will be looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.” （如蒙您的关注我不胜感激， 也期望在您方便的时候予以答复。）
疑问：安排周末上课，是否有点勉强？不如让他来提时间，然后你在调整？版本1按你原来的意思写的，版本2是按第二种意思写的。
祝你好运，要你成功了，别忘了送我几张你的演出门票！
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版本1:
Dear Prof. XXXX,
I am a music student majoring in Piano, and am currently enrolled as a student at XXX Conservatory of Music. I always hold a high respect for and want to study in your school, the XXX Institute of Music,because it is one of the best music schools in the world. I did not apply to your school last year because I felt that I wasn"t quite ready. Now I believe I am ready and am planning to apply for admission for the fall semester of 2008. I am also ready with all the piano pieces that I have been asked to play.
Ever since I started to learn piano as a child, I have already known you as world-known pianist and a great educator. I always dreamed of becoming a student of yours ever since I was a child, but have never had a chance for practical reasons. I am currently living in XXX city, and I wonder if I could come to XXX city to take some private lessons with you over weekends; I really hope to receive some hands-on instruction from you. I understand that you are extremely busy and may not have time over the weekends. In this case, Friday or any other week day is fine, although I will have to skip some of my classes. I will be most grateful to you if you could give me an opportunity.
I send you my sincere thanks for your attentions, and I will be looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
Best regards,
Sincerely yours,
XXXX XXX
版本2:
Dear Prof. XXXX,
I am a music student majoring in Piano, and am currently enrolled as a student at XXX Conservatory of Music. I always hold a high respect for and want to study in your school, the XXX Institute of Music,because it is one of the best music schools in the world. I did not apply to your school last year because I felt that I wasn"t quite ready. Now I believe I am ready and am planning to apply for admission for the fall semester of 2008. I am also ready with all the piano pieces that I have been asked to play.
Ever since I started to learn piano as a child, I have already known you as world-known pianist and a great educator. I always dreamed of becoming a student of yours ever since I was a child, but have never had a chance for practical reasons. I am currently living in XXX city, and I wonder if I could come to XXX city to take some private lessons with you; I really hope to receive some hands-on instruction from you. I understand that you are extremely busy and should you be willing to accommodate me for some lessons in your already busy schedule, I will do my best to rearrange my mine. I will be most grateful to you should you be so kind as to consider my proposal.
I send you my sincere thanks for your attentions, and I will be looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
Best regards,
Sincerely yours,
XXXX XXX
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Dear Dr.Gary,
(空2格)Good day!
(空2格)I am a music student in piano from China. I long to enter XXX Institute of music, one of the most famous music colleges in the world. However, I didn"t apply for your college last year because I was too busy to get ready. Although I am studying in XXX conservatory of music, I am not content with things as they are. So I decided to apply for your school next year and I have prepared it already.
(空2格)Since I started learning piano, I"ve known about you, who is a very famous pianist and educationalist. I started to yearn for being your student when I was very young but I had no chances to learn piano from you because I was not in America. Now I live in XXX, I want to come to XXX to learn music from you on Saturday or Sunday. I hope you can teach me. But if you have no time on these two days, I can still come to learn in weekdays although I have some lessons. I will do my best if you are willing to teach me one hour weekly.
(空2格)I looking forward to hearing from you soon.
(空2格)Regards!
Sincere, XXX（你的名字）
稍微改动了些句子，有些说的太绕了不大好，感觉你说的那个学校应该是音乐学院之类的吧，用College形容比较好吧？还有你去年没报名的理由我觉得你原文说的太过诚实不是很妥，所以帮你改动了下，还有我不是很明白你的主要目的到底是要报考那学校还是做那教授的学生？如果是做学生比较重要，就先写希望做他的学生，把后面那段先弄上来，那样就比较直接一些，免得他看的不知所谓。希望你满意。
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Dear Professor XXXX,
My name is FIRSTNAME LASTNAME, currently a student at XXX Conservatory of Music, majoring in Piano. I plan on applying to the XXX Institute of Music for the school year of 2008, and have prepared all the music pieces that I am going to play.
Ever since childhood, I have always admired you and wish that I could have the chance to study under your guidance. Thus, I was wondering if it is possible for me to meet with you for one hour every week or anytime you are available. I would be greatly appreciated.
Looking forward to your reply.
Sincerely,
XXX XXX
楼主啊~ 既然你说是email，那就要简单明了。教授们是不会花那个时间看一封长篇大论的，所以我帮你删掉很多。
还有一点善意的建议：
1）你的解释“我一直十分仰慕和向往XXXInstitute of music---这所世界上最著名的music school。然而由于我去年准备不充分……不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习”
这些事情，等你和这个教授混熟了，可以当作一些小事不经意的提一下。专门这样解释有点over。感觉像是在为自己找借口，不太好。
2）你说“目前住在XXX市。由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市来跟您上课…… 不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。”
呃~ 楼主既然住在美国，那因该有听说过“passive aggressive”这个词吧。 没错！你这段话说得就给人这种感觉。
3）楼上好多人的建议都很好。
楼主，加油~ Good Luck!
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Dear Gary XXXX professor:(he is male)
How do you do!I am a piano that comes from China professional student.I have been admiring and looking forward to the XXXInstitute of music very-this is in the world most the music school of the 著 .However because I prepared insufficiency last year, adding it to enter school a competition again very vigorous, I am in the end a moment gave up to register for examination an expensive school.Although I study in the XXX conservatory of music currently,I combine dissatisfied foot to study with only at the school of this file time.My decision registers for examination the XXXInstitute of music in next year, and have already got ready all songs.
The ego starts learn time of piano, I know you-the big pianist of 著 in this world, educator.I looked forward to the student who can become you since childhood, however I ain"t in the United States, so has been can"t carry out my wishes.
I live in the XXX City currently.Because Sunday on Saturday is the double rests a day, so I hope the ability is got to xxx City to have a class with you on this two days.I hope getting you point out very, also hoping you can draw out a little time in 100 favours to satisfy my this very small wishes.However if if you Sunday has no time on Saturday, from on Monday to Friday can also, though I may some lessons, my promise can certainly overcome all difficulties, arriving in any time that you specify.As long as you can draw out time for a hour to give me previous lesson at any time in every week, I feel grateful very.
My heat slice of hope your reply, thanks!
(I this is all letter that press Chinese to write completely of, if match not too American believe of write a method everyone to help me to change once, also have, need not turn over word by word, the meaning arrived to like, thanks everyone)
The problem add:The good elephant all has a little a small problem, someone affirmation which is accurate without any error?Because this E-MAIL is very important, influence I am life...The person of behind doesn"t copy a front of
I am in the United States, I not is admit, test.
Too thankful everyone suggest!
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亲爱的加利XXXX教授(他是男的)：
您好！我是一名来自中国的钢琴专业学生。我一直十分仰慕和向往音乐XXXInstitute ---这所世界上最著名的音乐学院。然而由于我去年准备不充分，加之入学竞争又十分激烈，我在最后一刻放弃了报考贵校。虽然目前我就读于XXX 音乐音乐学院，但我并不满足与仅在这样档次的学校学习。我决心于明年报考音乐XXXInstitute，并已经准备好了全部曲目。
自我开始学琴的时候，我就知道您---这位世界著名的大钢琴家，教育家。我自幼就向往能成为您的学生，然而由于我不在美国，因此一直无法实现我的愿望。
我目前住在XXX市。由于星期六星期日是双休日，所以我希望能在这两天到xxx市来跟您上课。我十分希望得到您的指点，还望您能在百忙之中，抽出一点时间来满足我这一个小小的愿望。不过如果您星期六星期日没有时间的话，周一到周五也可以，尽管我可能会有些课，但我保证一定能够排除万难，在任何您指定的时间到达。只要您能在每周的任何时候抽出一个小时的时间给我上一堂课，我就十分感激了。
我热切的盼望您的回复，谢谢！
（我这完全都是按中文的书信写的，如果不太符合美国信的写法大家帮我改一下啊，还有，不用逐字翻，意思到位就好了，谢谢大家啊）
问题补充：好象都有点小问题啊,有人肯定哪个是准确无误的吗?因为这封电子邮件很重要,要影响我一生的...后面的人不要抄前面的啊
我在美国,我不是没录取,是没考．
太感谢大家的建议了!
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Dear Professor Gary XXXX: Hello! I am come from China"s
piano specialized student. I continuously extremely admire and yearn
for XXXInstitute of in music--- this world most famous music school.
However because my last year prepared not fully, added the
matriculation competition to be extremely intense, I gave up in last
the moment register for the your school. Although at present I go
study to XXX conservatory of music, but I certainly do not satisfy
with only in such scale school study. I was determined will register
for XXXInstitute of music in the next year, and already prepared the
complete program. Oneself start study qin time, I know your --- this
world renowned 大钢琴 family, the educationalist. I yearned for
since childhood can become you the student, however as a result of me
not in US, therefore continuously is unable to realize my desire. I at
present live in XXX city. Because Saturday Sunday is double rests
Japan, therefore I hoped can come in these two days to xxx city with
you to attend class. I extremely hoped obtains your direction, but
also looks you to be able in spite of being very busy, extracts time
to satisfy I this small desire. But if you Saturday Sunday do not have
the time, also may Monday through Friday, although I possibly can some
classes, but I guaranteed certainly can overcome all difficulties,
assigns the time in any you to arrive. So long as you can in each week
any time extracts for a hour the time for me on a hall class, I
extremely felt grateful. I earnest hoped your reply, thanks!
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我为你翻译一份较美式的， 希望对您有所帮助！
我同意yangtranslator 的意见，所以把你不满意现在学校的档次修改了。另外，去年没报考的原因，我把竞争剧烈括弧起来，建议你不用。因为这样会显示你脆弱的自信心！
Dear Professor Gary xxx,
I am a Piano major student from China. All along I have been yearning to enter the world"s most famous music school, the xxx institute of music. However, I gave up the entrance application at the last minute in view of my inadequate preparations （and the stiff competitions.） I am now studying at the xxx conservatory of music which is not exactly up to my expectation; I am determined and well prepared to apply for next year"s entrance to xxx Institute of music.
I heard of your name, a world renowned great pianist and educator, ever since I started learning to play piano. And from early, I already longed to be your student. However, I was not in the States at the time, so I could not fulfill my dream.
At present, I am staying in xxx city. As Saturday and Sunday are my off days, I hope to make use of these two days to visit xxx city to attend your class. I am really dying for your guidance, so I hope that you can squeeze a little of your busy time to satisfy this small wish of mine. If you cannot spare your time on weekends, I can settle for weekdays too. Even though I may have some lessons, I promise to get through thick and thin and manage to arrive on any of your fixed time. I shall be very, very grateful if you can spend just one hour per week for my tutorial.
Passionately hoping to receiving your reply. Thank you very much.
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Dear Professor Gary XXXX (he is male):
Hello! I am come from China"s piano specialized student. Icontinuously extremely admire and yearn for XXXInstitute of inmusic--- this world most famous music school. However because my lastyear prepared not fully, added the matriculation competition to beextremely intense, I gave up in last the moment register for the yourschool. Although at present I go study to XXX conservatory of music,but I certainly do not satisfy with only in such scale school study. Iwas determined will register for XXXInstitute of music in the nextyear, and already prepared the complete program.
Oneself start study qin time, I know your --- this Pianist , the educationalist. I yearned for since childhoodcan become you the student, however as a result of me not in US,therefore continuously is unable to realize my desire.
I at present live in XXX city. Because Saturday Sunday is double restsJapan, therefore I hoped can come in these two days to xxx city withyou to attend class. I extremely hoped obtains your direction, butalso looks you to be able in spite of being very busy, extracts timeto satisfy I this small desire. But if you Saturday Sunday do not havethe time, also may Monday through Friday, although I possibly can someclasses, but I guaranteed certainly can overcome all difficulties,assigns the time in any you to arrive. So long as you can in each weekany time extracts for a hour the time for me on a hall class, Iextremely felt grateful.
I earnest hoped your reply, thanks!